Wednesday, March 11, 2009

Vampire Ghost By Sarah

"Come on lets go to the haunted house before it's to late Lauren"said Henry quickly so she took her tiara and ran down-stairs to the car with her pretty dress 'cause she was a princess . Finally they were in the halloween carnival . When they went in side they saw lots of games and prizes to get then they saw the biggest haunted house and Henry ran to the haunted house with his sword 'cause he was a pirate and when Henry was running he said "Argh" so Lauren and their mother ran and said"wait Henry" almost panting like they can not breath and finally they reached to the biggest haunted house . When Lauren and their mother went in then they were shocked 'cause they saw lots of creepy things like little spiders,big spider webs and lots of more creepy things . Then when they reached to the end of the haunted house they saw Henry looking at the scary ghosts when Lauren,their mother and saw the scariest ghost ever and Henry said"look at that, that looks like a vampire ghost" frighteningly . Then a noise came out from the back of them and it said "boo" then Henry and Lauren ran out side and when their mother came out of the haunted house panting then Lauren and Henry said"I want to go home mom!"and the mother said"oh come on there lots of stuff to see and remember we are going for trick-o-treating "then Lauren and Henry said very loudly "I WANT TO GO HOME" so their mother went to the car and drove home .

4 comments:

Mr.Marshall said...

I love your story Sarah! What great ideas and adjectives you added. Mr. Marshall

2MM Student said...

You have great ideas in your story, however I think you should revise your work and make sure you don't have any grammar mistakes!
What an Amazing peice of Writing!!

2MM Student said...

I like your story.Good writing.

Anagha

2MM Student said...

I like your story Sarah! I could see loads of adjestives you have, Sarah! Was Lorna really a princess? I have a book called Magic kitten and it has a girl named Lorna too! Keep up the good writing.
Jessica